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watchdog
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by watchdog » Fri Feb 09, 2007 2:58 am
Well thats all I have for now, I'm still trying to ferret out chapter 16 and I'll post when and if I get it finished.
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Dragoon
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by Dragoon » Fri Feb 09, 2007 3:46 am
Great story! It's got a good plot and you're doing a good job with the characters.
It would be a bit easier to read if you put breaks in between paragraphs, though.
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watchdog
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by watchdog » Fri Feb 09, 2007 4:11 am
Thanks, I thought I had paragraph breaks. Thats what happens I guess when you use a pocket PC to write your story.
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sonofccn
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by sonofccn » Sat Feb 10, 2007 1:52 am
YOU!CAN'T! STOP! NOW!
This is a great story, and I do look forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work.
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watchdog
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by watchdog » Sat Feb 10, 2007 4:54 am
Oh dont worry, I'm not going to stop. I've just hit a snag and dont know what to do next in the story (I would accept suggestions). At some point there will be a duel, I might even let Kirk wield a lightsaber (because Obereth uses two) and I think Luke might get to fly the Enterprise at some point.
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Dragoon
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by Dragoon » Sat Feb 10, 2007 5:20 am
watchdog wrote:I think Luke might get to fly the Enterprise at some point.
I can see that now...
"What are ye doin' to the ship lad? Ye'll fly 'er apart!"
"Relax! It's just like Beggar's Canyon back home!"
*puzzled stare*
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GStone
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by GStone » Sat Feb 10, 2007 2:23 pm
I haven't had a chance to read all of it, but if you're gonna give Kirk a lightsabre at some point, Sulu could fight with one along side him. I forget the ep, but Sulu was going around the ship shirtless one time and waving around a sword.
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watchdog
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by watchdog » Sun Feb 11, 2007 6:42 am
GStone wrote:I haven't had a chance to read all of it, but if you're gonna give Kirk a lightsabre at some point, Sulu could fight with one along side him. I forget the ep, but Sulu was going around the ship shirtless one time and waving around a sword.
That, unfortunatly, wont happen. Sulu wont be with Kirk. I dont know what I'll do with it yet but I'm personally looking foreward to writing Luke flying the Enterprise.
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by Mike DiCenso » Sun Feb 11, 2007 10:49 pm
GStone wrote:I haven't had a chance to read all of it, but if you're gonna give Kirk a lightsabre at some point, Sulu could fight with one along side him. I forget the ep, but Sulu was going around the ship shirtless one time and waving around a sword.
That was "The Naked Time" [TOS1]
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by somerandomhobo » Mon Mar 26, 2007 11:16 pm
I think it would be cool if luke and spock did a vulcan mind meld