When Empires Collide

watchdog · Post by **watchdog** » Fri Feb 09, 2007 2:58 am

Well thats all I have for now, I'm still trying to ferret out chapter 16 and I'll post when and if I get it finished.

Dragoon · Post by **Dragoon** » Fri Feb 09, 2007 3:46 am

Great story! It's got a good plot and you're doing a good job with the characters.

It would be a bit easier to read if you put breaks in between paragraphs, though.

watchdog · Post by **watchdog** » Fri Feb 09, 2007 4:11 am

Thanks, I thought I had paragraph breaks. Thats what happens I guess when you use a pocket PC to write your story.

sonofccn · Post by **sonofccn** » Sat Feb 10, 2007 1:52 am

YOU!CAN'T! STOP! NOW!

This is a great story, and I do look forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

watchdog · Post by **watchdog** » Sat Feb 10, 2007 4:54 am

Oh dont worry, I'm not going to stop. I've just hit a snag and dont know what to do next in the story (I would accept suggestions). At some point there will be a duel, I might even let Kirk wield a lightsaber (because Obereth uses two) and I think Luke might get to fly the Enterprise at some point.

Dragoon · Post by **Dragoon** » Sat Feb 10, 2007 5:20 am

watchdog wrote:I think Luke might get to fly the Enterprise at some point.

I can see that now...

"What are ye doin' to the ship lad? Ye'll fly 'er apart!"

"Relax! It's just like Beggar's Canyon back home!"

*puzzled stare*

GStone · Post by **GStone** » Sat Feb 10, 2007 2:23 pm

I haven't had a chance to read all of it, but if you're gonna give Kirk a lightsabre at some point, Sulu could fight with one along side him. I forget the ep, but Sulu was going around the ship shirtless one time and waving around a sword.

watchdog · Post by **watchdog** » Sun Feb 11, 2007 6:42 am

GStone wrote:I haven't had a chance to read all of it, but if you're gonna give Kirk a lightsabre at some point, Sulu could fight with one along side him. I forget the ep, but Sulu was going around the ship shirtless one time and waving around a sword.

That, unfortunatly, wont happen. Sulu wont be with Kirk. I dont know what I'll do with it yet but I'm personally looking foreward to writing Luke flying the Enterprise.

Post by **Mike DiCenso** » Sun Feb 11, 2007 10:49 pm

GStone wrote:I haven't had a chance to read all of it, but if you're gonna give Kirk a lightsabre at some point, Sulu could fight with one along side him. I forget the ep, but Sulu was going around the ship shirtless one time and waving around a sword.

That was "The Naked Time" [TOS1]
-Mike

somerandomhobo · Post by **somerandomhobo** » Mon Mar 26, 2007 11:16 pm

I think it would be cool if luke and spock did a vulcan mind meld